Wednesday, April 26, 2006

[senryu]

bus stop—
reluctant pupil
in tears

7 comments:

Lae said...

On it's on this would bring to mind a child genuinely afraid to go do school for some reason. The bigger bully comes to my mind immediately. - And it is a touching story.

But considering the prior post - this takes on a whole new,and more profound meaning. Very well done.

bigshoulders said...

thanks lae. i actually witnessed this happen when behind a stopped school bus one morning. i thought about it for several, several miles.

thanks for stopping by!
kevin

Natalia L. Rudychev said...

Well done.
I've witnessed this scene several times as well. It stays in your mind, makes a pause in your thoughts - like a bus stop.

Anonymous Poet said...

Awwww. . . . Sad. I can see this in my mind, perfectly. A wonderful haiku if there ever was one. Succinct, yet highly evocative.

bigshoulders said...

thanks Natalia! it did stay with me.

AP: thanks for the vote of confidence! that's the challenge of 'ku... thanks for stopping in!

kevin

Danielle said...

Curious. Cool.

bittersweet said...

Aww. I'm sure the tears will be gone with the help of some newfound friends :)

C